Artistic License

January 18, 2010

Status update- January 18’th

Filed under: Uncategorized — Joana @ 7:53 pm

I’m back at college, which means two things- twenty-four/seven internet access and classes taking up my time.  While I do carry around my writing notebook with me everywhere, I tend to not write an incredible amount during classes because I actually have to pay attention at least part of the time (or else my professors tell me I need to when they see I’m not taking class notes).

However, over the weekend while I was still home, I managed to rewrite a good chunk of Artistic License, a couple chapters that would be near the end.  Of course, as far as posting on inkpop is concerned, these particular chapters won’t see the light of day any time soon since I have so much between what’s online now and those chapters to still edit and post.

Despite the fact that my schedule is somewhat more busy, I’m hoping that this semester at college will be a lot better.  I went through a lot of emotional stress the last time, but I’m off the medication that we think caused it (and no, it wasn’t anti-depressants).  I realize anyone that still reads this blog might not be interested about my personal state, but I thought that just might be an interesting tid-bit.  And warning in case I suddenly drop off the face of the earth again.

Until next time 😀

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January 14, 2010

Status update- January 14’th

Filed under: Editing — Joana @ 4:35 pm

I completely rewrote one of the scenes in chapter five!  It feels good to get that in there, in a way, because I’m still in the top ten at inkpop so I’m hoping that the more I improve, the more people who are pickier about what they read will be willing to put it in their Picks and bump up the rating.  I’ve been doing a lot of advertising since that seems to be the only way someone will really notice you there.  I suppose it’s getting me ready for the ‘real world’ as far as publishing goes, because people won’t know my book is out in stores if they don’t know it exists at all XD

Ah well.  I’m not sure what part I’ll work on next, but I’ll try to at least do some edits tomorrow.  I’ll be going back to school on the eighteenth so I’ll be back in class and then who knows how much time I’ll actually have for editing.  Until tomorrow!

January 13, 2010

Status update- January 13’th

Filed under: Editing — Joana @ 2:51 pm

I edited chapter five and six of Artistic License a little, but I’m feeling a little… raw today and I don’t feel like I can keep my attention on it long enough to do anything significant.  I’d really like to edit it as much as possible before I put up a new chapter.  I’ve actually already started rewriting a piece of it near the end that I decided didn’t work, but as I said, it’s near the end so it won’t be seen for a while.

As always, anyone that would like to see Artistic License and/or help me improve it as I work towards publication, feel free to go look it up on inkpop!  You can’t comment anon, but it’s a great site so I’m sure creating an account there wouldn’t be too much of a hassle 😀 And if you don’t want to, you can leave any thoughts in the comments for the most recent post here on the blog.

Until next time!

January 8, 2010

Artistic License progress

Filed under: Editing — Joana @ 1:57 pm

I’ve been doing a lot of editing lately for AL.  I posted it up on a website for young-adult stories called inkpop (it can be found at http://inkpop.com/projects/3607/artistic-license/).  It’s far from perfect, and I haven’t even done edits to the full draft yet, but I like the way it’s progressing.  If there are people reading this that aren’t yet on inkpop, I’d love it if you could go on there and take a look!

As I said before, I’ve been doing a lot of edits to it, but I’ve also learned a few things about the editing process: you shouldn’t listen to all of your critics.  I think they purposefully try to contradict each other.  It’s some kind of conspiracy, I swear.  While I’ve gotten a lot of valuable critiques on what I have up so far, not all of it is valid or applicable to my writing.  In other words: you can’t please everyone.  This is kind of a problem I used to have.  Everyone has their own opinion on how a piece should go, but they’re just that: opinions.  Not all of them are well-informed and can often hurt the piece more than help it.

So basically I’m gonna go forward with editing Artistic License as I get more feedback via inkpop and anywhere else I put it.  At this point I’ve decided not to give the rough draft to people unless it’s just because they want to read what I wrote for NaNo.  I’ve changed and edited so much that it’s better if you just read it online XD

And I do plan to revive this blog, since I’m still working on Artistic License.  Until next time, fans.

November 22, 2009

The End

Filed under: Uncategorized — Joana @ 12:48 am

The end of Artistic License is near.

And by that I mean I’m almost done writing it.  Or at least I’m pretty sure I am.  Being a college student I have vacations and stuff, and I’m hoping the time home will give me time to relax and think over Artistic License, and complete it so that I can let it set for a while and then edit.

And speaking of editing, that offer for Google Wave invites is still open to anyone that wants to help me edit.  I already created a wave for it, which I’ll drop the finished document into so you can download it and have a read-through, then leave comments on the wave.

And if it makes you feel better, I’ll mention you in the Dedications section when I’m published several years down the road 😀

I don’t plan on posting any more excerpts.  That’s mostly because I’m finishing up and connecting scenes together so there’s not really much to choose from.  Again, if you agree to help edit, you’ll get to read the book in its entirety.

I’ll probably post something here when I finally do finish the book.  But until then, readers!

November 21, 2009

Novel Excerpt- November 20’th

Filed under: Novel excerpts — Joana @ 12:08 am

“You okay, Mike?” I asked. ‘GAME OVER’ came onto the screen before long, and Michael put the gun back in the holder. He smiled at me, but it wasn’t a very convincing one.

“Why wouldn’t I be?” he asked. I blinked at him a couple times, which he seemed to understand was my way of saying he was really not passing it off at all. “I guess I’m just kind of wishing Natalie wouldn’t say all those things like I’m not around to hear them. Despite my robot-like moods, I’m not completely heartless.”

“And you still hate your dad,” I said. Michael leaned against the video game machine. There was a younger-looking kid kind of lurking around, looking like he was waiting for us to move away so he could play, but Michael didn’t really care.

“It’s kind of… died over the years, but yeah,” he said. “I hated my father a lot when Miranda and my parents were divorcing because he tried to screw her over so much. Mom and Dad fought a lot even before they divorced, and he was always the one that started it. When we were younger it was because she didn’t have a job, and when she finally went to school and started in real estate, it would be because no one would be home to take care of the cleaning and cooking. When Miranda and I started doing all that so Dad wouldn’t have an excuse to yell at Mom, Stacey came along and Mom was out of her job on maternity leave. It just… never ended. Mom could never do anything right.”

Michael was looking to the side by this time, and a quick look around showed that the kid who had been wanting to play on the arcade machine had left. Misty, Miranda and Natalie were talking amongst themselves while we all waited for Natalie’s parents to come and bring us out to supper. We had been there long enough for the next round of movies to open up, so the only people in the lobby besides us and a few stragglers in the snack bar line were the staff, who weren’t really paying attention.

Before I got the chance to do anything involving hugging him or just holding his hand, though, Michael leaned away from the game machine and smiled.

“But it’s not like it’s a big deal anymore considering that I haven’t talked to Dad in a few years,” he said. “And Mom seems a lot happier. Well, now, anyway. She kind of still drinks a lot, but what can you do?” He just kind of shrugged at this like he really didn’t know what he could do about the fact that his mother apparently went out several times a week and drank herself into oblivion. And that was… actually kind of scary, now that I thought about it.

November 19, 2009

Novel Excerpt- November 19’th

Filed under: Uncategorized — Joana @ 9:36 pm

"Hello, Natalie," Michael said quietly. Natalie rose her eyebrows at him like she was rather surprised by this reaction.

"Michael, are you sick? Where’d your voice go?" she asked. Michael shook his head and turned back to look at me.

"I’m not sick, Natalie," he said. Natalie frowned at that and seemed to think about something.

"Hmm. I knew you changed after your parents’ divorce, but I didn’t know you lost the ability to speak," she said with a smile. It wasn’t as big as that grin she had been giving him as soon as she had stepped into the room, and it actually seemed more genuine.

"I didn’t lose my ability to speak, I just learned some self-control," Michael said. "One of us had to, and we both know it wasn’t going to be Miranda." Natalie nodded her agreement, and then she turned, finally seeming to notice me.

"Ah, who’s your friend? I don’t think Miranda mentioned him when she asked me to come visit," she said. I kind of glanced up at her before picking my charcoal stick back up and going back to my drawing. It was probably a third of the way done, actually, but I still had a lot of minor details I had to put in before I was ready to start painting it. As I was drawing I kept to myself. I knew that if Michael wanted to tell Natalie about us, it was going to be on his own terms. He would hate me forever if I did something like tell his ex-girlfriend that he was gay, even if it was her that broke up with him instead of the other way around.

"This is Cameron," Michael said. "He’s in the visual arts department, in case you couldn’t tell from the fact that he seems to think that drawing is more important than introducing himself." I rose my eyebrows and put my charcoal stick back down.

"What? I was just leaving my introduction up to your discretion," I said. Michael rolled his eyes and turned back to Natalie, who looked just a bit confused.

“I’m glad to see you again, but there’s not really much for you to do around here,” he said. Natalie smiled at that.

“Miranda said we’d all go out and see a movie, actually,” she said. “She said your friend could come to, apparently.” She looked over at me again like she wasn’t sure how to deal with me. Geeze, she didn’t even know I was gay yet. Paranoid much?

“Ooh, invited along to a movie with Michael. My dream has come true,” I said, grinning as I started to put away my stuff. Natalie was heading for the door and she kind of looked between us, seeming more confused than anything.

“I’ll be outside. Miranda said she’d wait for us,” Natalie finally said.

Once she was gone, Michael spun around on his stool so he was facing me.

“Geeze, Cameron, you think you could be a little less subtle?” he asked. I smiled as I put under my arm. I had considered just leaving it in there, but I felt weary, even though there really wasn’t an issue with vandalism at the school. Better to be safe than sorry, yeah?

“Of course I could. I was holding back for your benefit.”

November 18, 2009

Novel Excerpt- November 18’th

Filed under: Novel excerpts — Joana @ 6:49 pm

“I’m in the math and science department, Miranda,” he said. “I am not in any way, shape or form a performer.”

“I dunno, you played straight pretty well for several years,” Miranda said. “You even had that girlfriend Natalie, remember? Whatever happened to her? I don’t think you two actually officially broke up.”

“Yes we did, Miranda, you just didn’t see it,” Michael said, looking over to me instead. “I told her I had gotten into Clearbell and she told me to take a hike.” Miranda stopped dancing at that and looked utterly confused.

“She doesn’t seem like the kind of person who would do that so harshly,” she said. Michael shrugged.

“Well, maybe not in so many words, but she broke up with me, that’s all that really matters,” he said. “And I haven’t even talked to her in so long it just seems… worse than it was, I guess.”

“Yeah, but if you hadn’t broken up with her, you may never have gotten me,” I said with a grin. Michael rolled his eyes.

“If Natalie hadn’t broken up with me then, one of us would’ve done it sooner or later,” he said. “I doubt she could last through a relationship where she could only see me on holidays and vacations.”

I stared at the canvas before me in the silence that ensued. Miranda had walked over so that she was closer to Michael, but she didn’t seem ready to say anything.

“You know what I should do?” Miranda asked, pulling up a stool so she could sit beside her brother. I had started drawing again as an attempt to show that I wanted nothing to do with guessing what Miranda should do. When Michael saw I wasn’t taking this one, he sighed and turned around on his stool so he was facing his sister.

“I don’t know, Miranda. What should you do?” he asked. Miranda grinned at that, knowing her brother had taken the bait.

“I’m going to call up Natalie and ask her to visit this weekend,” she said. When Michael gaped at her, Miranda held her hands up defensively. “Hey, she was my friend too, and we dropped out of each other’s lives when I came here to Clearbell. I didn’t even want to, but since you two had broken up it seemed kind of like rubbing salt in the wound to keep having her around.”

Michael sighed and slumped a little. I had never seen him react like this to any idea ever, even Miranda’s bad ones.

“Fine,” he said. “If Natalie would be willing to actually come and visit I’m not complaining. But don’t expect her to say yes.” Miranda stuck her tongue out at Michael as she stood up.

“You haven’t even tried to contact her since we came to Clearbell,” she said. “For all you know she wants to make up and get back together with you.” She glanced over at me at that. “Not that it would work, of course, but you can’t blame the girl for trying. We’re both pretty good-looking people.”

“Then see if she wants to go out with you,” Michael said. Miranda ignored him and started dialing on her phone as she headed into the hall so we could hear her.

November 17, 2009

Novel Excerpt- November 17’th

Filed under: Novel excerpts — Joana @ 10:22 pm

“I swear Sarah is trying to stalk me,” he said. “She just… won’t leave me alone. She isn’t even asking about you or Miranda, she’s just like ‘Oh hey, Michael, how are you doing?’.” I kind of blinked at him, still holding him around the shoulders.

“Isn’t that what’s known as basic human interaction?” I asked. Michael kind of gave me a look before making me let go of him. “I’m just saying! You aren’t exactly the most social person in the world. Shawn’s all but said that you scare the bejeesus out of him.” Michael had been going over to his stool, but he just kind of stopped and looked back to me.

“Bejeesus? Seriously?” he asked. When I didn’t respond, he shook his head. “Never mind. I know I scare Shawn. I’m not stupid.” He went the rest of the way to the stool, and I decided to sit back at my easel. “It’s not like I do it on purpose. Shawn hasn’t done anything to make me hate him. Well, other than taking my picture.” Miranda stopped dancing at that and looked over at Michael like she thought he was insane.

“You seriously would hate someone because they tried to take your picture?” she asked. Michael seemed to think about this, but he didn’t look over to my easel, where I had the picture of us at the beach set up to draw from.

“Well no, I just don’t like my picture taken,” he said. “I’m sure you can understand that kind of thing, Miranda.” Miranda shrugged and continued dancing around, jumping up onto the table and swinging around.

“I’m a performer, Michael; I thrive on the kind of attention that’s paid to you by people who want to take your picture,” she said. Michael shrugged his shoulders and turned to watch as I started drawing. “I honestly can’t understand how I got a brother who hates the attention.” She took a couple steps across the table. “Actually, you used to love that kind of attention. Why don’t you anymore, Michael?”

“I loved that kind of attention because I thought I needed it,” Michael said. “Now I realize I don’t.” He met my eye for a couple seconds and smiled, all of which Miranda completely ignored in favor of her own dancing.

November 16, 2009

Novel Excerpt- November 16’th

Filed under: Novel excerpts — Joana @ 11:01 pm

Misty stared at Michael like she wasn’t sure if he was serious or not.

“You have no idea what’s going on, do you?” she asked. Michael glanced over to Devin, who was saying something to one of Sarah’s drone friends.

“Yes, and I can honestly say that I don’t care,” he said. “High school drama is high school drama even at an art school. I’ve had enough drama in my life without getting involved in all of this.” I frowned at him at that, but he didn’t seem to notice as he went back to his food. I glanced over to Devin again to see that he was looking positively happy as Sarah continued talking to him. As I said before, Sarah’s the kind of person that needs the validation of a group. I guess that’s part of the reason why she decided to go into the acting department. You can be as dramatic as you want and crowds of people will eat it up.

Geeze, I guess I really haven’t thought about Sarah in a while. Why is it that I’m just now seeing all these annoying things about her?

“Oh really? You know what’s been going on between Devin and Jamie?” Misty asked, raising an eyebrow at Michael. Michael nodded, glancing over to them before going back to his food.

“Devin’s straight, Jamie’s gay, Jamie likes Devin, Devin doesn’t realize it. You don’t have to be a rocket scientist to figure it out.” Michael continued eating after that as if that was that.

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